From Cut Knees to Muddy Knees

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Cmn cmn cmn...i litterally cnt wait 4 the next update!!!:)
 
I had been in the Barcelona Youth squad now for a one month and we are becoming a dominant force. I have been chosen to play in a Under 15s Spanish tournement in England. Teams like England, Chille, Russia are all contending. I got a phone call about a week ago. ​

I had the nicest new boots in the world. A pair of Addidas Adipros. My training kit was just so comfortable. I have not been able to sign a contract with Barcelona yet as I am only 16 but I would love to. ​

I was leaving with the youth team in about a week. We were going by Madrid airport and landing at Heathrow. I was looking forward to it so much. I knew some of the other lads anyway as some of them are my mates at Barcelona. The coach also seamed like a nice guy.​

My Mum and Dad were ok now about not seing me as much as normal. I train with Barcelona three times a week and on a saturday we have a league game against oppisition teams from our league. I am not earning anymoney from Barcelona but in a month I am 16 and I cannot wait to just get my hands on some $$$$.​



A debut in the national team for Pedro Hulio Pablo Alonso whats instore for him next?​
 
Just read it all, great story but would you mind spell checking it in word or going over it as it takes the gloss off it a bit with the spelling. i hope you dont take offense to this as its a great story but that would make it even better.
 
I just said im not criticising at all, i was just saying a small spell check would make it a better read but if you actually read what i put i said it was a great story :S I didn't at any point say my story was any good? Did i? Or am i mistaken?

Very poor attitude to have when someone is trying to be helpful. I'll remember not to next time mate. Very mature of you!
 
i agree with above, just spellcheck it mate. makes it easier to read.

Also, trying putting quotation marks around speech and making it easier to read, so we know when a person is talking, as it's quite tricky to read atm.

Try and get you're timing sorted as well, it seems to be jumpimg around a bit.

other than though, good story. good idea as well and if written well, could be one of the best stories on the site...
 
I didn't say i didnt like it. I said spell checking would make it even better. From four star to five? Things like "meat your teammates" ... erm ok.

Grow up mate its meant to be helpful.
 
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