I know this is a little off-topic but this is the most active forum I know, so I'm asking my fellow FM'ers for help
. To apply for university I have written a motivation letter, in English. Since English isn't my native language, it could be that I have made some mistakes here and there, and because a lot of you guys are from the UK or just really good at English, I wanted to ask you to please read my letter and correct my mistakes and give feedback. Your help will be really appreciated!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to apply for the International Business Administration Bachelor?s program at the VU University in Amsterdam.
At first, I would like to introduce myself and give some background information about me. My name is [my name]. I am 18 years old and I am born and raised in the Netherlands. In primary school I was a quick learner, and I was able to remember the teaching material better than the average child of my age could. Because of this, a few other pupils and I were chosen to take part in an additional program beside our standard primary school program, which allowed us to further improve our learning skills and get a step ahead in the subjects maths and English. In secondary school I followed the VWO program, of which I will be graduating soon. During my time at secondary school I also took part in the First Certificate Cambridge course. At the end of this this course, which was fully taught in English and lasted two years, I also spend a week at a host family in Cambridge as part of the course.
The reason why I have a chosen to apply for the International Business Administration program, is that it offers the opportunity to work and study in an internationally focussed environment. The international exchange is also really something I think I could greatly benefit from in both educational and social aspects. I was raised with both Dutch and Indonesian culture, since my mother?s family is from Indonesia. Because of this, I developed an open-minded view towards people from around the world and their mentality towards life.
The VU University in Amsterdam is my first choice for the IBA program. Not just because of its high reputation, but also because it is located in one of the most multicultural cities in Europe. I believe that Amsterdam?s diversity in cultures and traditions makes it the perfect place for me to follow the IBA program, so I can develop as a person and prepare myself for a future career.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I?m looking forward to your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
[my name]
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to apply for the International Business Administration Bachelor?s program at the VU University in Amsterdam.
At first, I would like to introduce myself and give some background information about me. My name is [my name]. I am 18 years old and I am born and raised in the Netherlands. In primary school I was a quick learner, and I was able to remember the teaching material better than the average child of my age could. Because of this, a few other pupils and I were chosen to take part in an additional program beside our standard primary school program, which allowed us to further improve our learning skills and get a step ahead in the subjects maths and English. In secondary school I followed the VWO program, of which I will be graduating soon. During my time at secondary school I also took part in the First Certificate Cambridge course. At the end of this this course, which was fully taught in English and lasted two years, I also spend a week at a host family in Cambridge as part of the course.
The reason why I have a chosen to apply for the International Business Administration program, is that it offers the opportunity to work and study in an internationally focussed environment. The international exchange is also really something I think I could greatly benefit from in both educational and social aspects. I was raised with both Dutch and Indonesian culture, since my mother?s family is from Indonesia. Because of this, I developed an open-minded view towards people from around the world and their mentality towards life.
The VU University in Amsterdam is my first choice for the IBA program. Not just because of its high reputation, but also because it is located in one of the most multicultural cities in Europe. I believe that Amsterdam?s diversity in cultures and traditions makes it the perfect place for me to follow the IBA program, so I can develop as a person and prepare myself for a future career.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I?m looking forward to your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
[my name]