Slaying The Dragons -- The English Youth Academy

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just read through this great story. 10 pages for a season and a half :$
 
martinbissett said:
just read through this great story. 10 pages for a season and a half :$
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Tick, Tock. Tick, Tock.​

"Is this a joke?"I spoke aloud, the hair on the back of my spine tingled.
"I can assure you, Mr. Brooking, this is far from a joke." The foreign voice sternly grumbled back to me, "I''m a patient man, but this is a matter that must be hurried along, I need your immediate reply."
"I'm sorry but I need to speak to some people before making the desicion, can you give me a week?" I muttered back, noticably trembling.
"Very well, but I do hope you are not wasting our time, Mr. Brooking."
"I hope I'm not."
The phone went dead.​

"Or did I?" I couldn't really understand why they'd approached me, of all the people they could have. I was totally unsuitable for the job, and I knew it. I wouldn't be able to handle that sort of pressure; I'd had no experience at that sort of thing.​

I sat back in my armchair, which seemed to squak at me, I'd been gaining alot of weight recently, but that was due to the relatively old age of the chair, I hope. I knew I would let alot of people down either way and that delaying the desicion for longer was only going to make things worse.​

The man who had phoned me was one of the richest men in football. Khaldoon Al Mubarak is known for his strict regimes and his firm grasp over his club. This had resulted in the parting of ways between his club, Manchester City, and former manager Roberto Mancini.​

He'd offered me £92million in spending money. He tempted me with how the press would react to my rags to riches situation. He tempted me with treble my current wage. He tempted me with the oppurtunity to bring all of my backroom staff with me. It was certainly a tempting offer.​

But I had other things on my mind. Only yesterday, I had got home from a hard day at the training pitch and had "February 2011, closer... closer" sprayed on the side of my prize Bentley. It was worrying. Very worrying; and with everything I had to deal with, it came at precisely the wrong time.​


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I pushed everything outside of football out of my mind, and realised just how big a month this really was. I would be under severe pressure to sell Michael Mancienne and Scott Loach; two lads I didn't want to sell. Michael had just had his 23rd birthday, and I had to get rid of him either this window, or the next, or he'd be going on a free.​

Along with everything else, the two legs of the League Cup Semi Final meant we had 8 games this month, leaving us far more fatigued than anyone else in the league. Great. But it would be worth it, we had to make it, we really did. And when we did, it'd be so, so sweet.​


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In the end, I'd reluctantly rejected the Manchester City offer in favour of our solid League 1 outfit at St. George's Park. Was I mad? It seemed a ridiculous desicion but I came to a heroes welcome on the Tuesday morning after I rejected the offer. The lads had heard Frank Rjikaard had taken over at Eastlands, on Sky Sports News.​

I'd seen some brilliant performances in the month of January, and Kwaeme Atta, the young 16 year old midfielder, had produced a stunner of a match to earn himself the match ball against an, albeit laklustre Colchester side. Nile Ranger also pulled out a stonker to net four (yes, four) against Yeovil as we made our way back into the game from 2-0 down.

But best of all was we were headed to Wembley. Aston Villa were to be our opponents and I was hugely excited for the clash. Fabian Delph need no insipiration, facing his former club, and I'm going to make sure he is on the teamsheet. A real chance of silverware, wow. Just wow.​

I was delighted that Michael Mancienne wanted to stay. I'd turned down multiple offers from clubs such as Udinese, Wolfsburg, Porto, Celtic and Aston Villa but he remains committed to the St. George cause for as long as he can be. But Scotty L on the other hand seems transfixed with Manchester United after their £2.4m bid. I told them to stick it where the sun don't shine for now. Hopefully they'll be back in the Summer.​

And as the days ploughed on, February drew closer and closer. I was beginning to grow weary now. What did all this really mean? The original phone call back in November '09, the constant letters and now the spray painting? Why would someone go to such extreme lengths for me, a mere League 1 manager? So many questions, yet so few answers.​


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What do people reckon, decent update? I tried to get you to think the conversation was with the Spanish guy, sort of. Any feedback would be awesome.
 
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Really good update. Had me going for a while there with 'The Spanish Man' ;) your writing is excellent. I hope you continue this story for quite some time. And unlucky about the Bentley ;)
 
Leeds are in the Championship still, I think.
 
Great update, I love going to this story while I'm bored, keep it up.

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Very good update Eds, i was worried you were going to accept and do a Brian Clough (Brighton - Leeds - 1974...) but i'm delighted you've decided to stay, i think it's for the best, for now at least. Will update in a little bit, got some things to do first.
 
quite possibly one of the best stories i've ever read on here;

the detail in each and every post is phenomenal;
and your writing skills are superb;

keep it up
 
I'm feeling a bit depressed because I'm so excited and can't wait for the next update of a football story, kinda sad :L.
Seriously can't wait for February.
With most stories after a few in game months the level of detail and enthusiasm stops but not with this one.
Keep going.
 
Are people up for a special update for February? It's quite a big month, so I will do a really big update if you guys like. Read as much or as little of it as you want.
 
It'll be up late tonight or tomorrow morning.
 
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Dragon Slayers fans hoping for Giant Killing
Fans of St. George FC are expected to flock in their thousands to Wembley on February 27 to see their newly created team take on Premier League giants, and contenders for a European place this year, Aston Villa. The League 1 side, managed by ex-footballer turn legendary manager (in just a season and half!), Trevor Brooking have beaten several supposedly 'better' teams to get this far, the most notable of which was the Quarter Final penalties victory against Arsene Wenger's big guns, in a team including captain Cesc Fabregas, and tricky russian Andrey Arshavin. The Arsenal manager was gracious in defeat and has apparently offered his support to his old friend and ex-assistant manager, Joss Bennett, who has now taken the same role up at St. George's Park. During an interview, he said that the whole team was 'really looking forward to this [the final]'and that they had started doing their pre-match preparation almost as soon they knew who they were going to be up against. Bennett also praised the team's determination and was full of praise for the youngsters who are also doing consistently well in their domestic league. He said: "To be 18 or 19 as most of these lads are, [and] not to get tired, is amazing, I used to run around for 2 hours and be exhausted, these kids are doing it every week, and taking part in long training sessions [in preparation for the Carling Cup final]" When the assistant manager was quizzed by Goal.com about the futures of Goalkeeper Scott Loach, and defender Michael Mancienne, he was quiet on the subject, but did admit that although it was a massive pity to let them go, it was part of the job here and at every football club eventually, adding that 'Michael [Mancienne] is 23 now, and rules state that we must either sell him to an interested party, or let him go on a free, Scott is a little younger, but is understandably worried at the prospect of not getting enough football, considering the form Alex [Smithies] has been in...We can confirm that there has been an offer, which was rejected by the club, because we felt it was not satisfactory, i am keeping in touch with Scott Loach, and if he has a problem, he can come to me, or Trevor. As far as i know, he is happy for now, but is excited at the prospect of being allowed to move clubs soon in search of first team football at a very important stage in his career.' ​
 
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